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    dots Submission Name: dots

    Author: Daniel Barlow
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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         and we are this beautiful, inexact, exciting. sorrowful
         clutter to the landscape. the city in dark. the hum of
         our edges.


         our whites bruised.

    Submitted on 2017-08-08 15:57:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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