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    dots Submission Name: Relentless. The Visceral Fracture.dots
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    Author: Daniel Barlow
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    dotsRelentless. The Visceral Fracture.dots
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          like sticks of glass
         bending to keep apart great tonnages of rock
         it's not like i'm inclined toward
         any fatality

         

                                            however
    the wait will kill me





    Submitted on 2017-08-08 20:41:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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                                                 without end.
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         life could find no shape

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