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Author: Daniel Barlow
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Words: 71
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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          when you are
          over there

                                                                           so peaceful.

          to commit to you

                                                  * the lucid sentence
                                                  * scratched out of the oxygen


     i'd never considered that there were alien ships
     hidden in the clouds
     at their maneuvers
     using the night's lightning as cover

Submitted on 2017-08-09 17:52:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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boom. mother fuckers.

| Posted on 2017-08-09 00:00:00 | by thesunbird | [ Reply to This ]

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