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    dots Submission Name: The Curtain Calldots

    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Misc/Death
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    dotsThe Curtain Calldots

    Unfamiliar faces all with stories written upon their skin,
    Filling a tiny empty room.
    Gloom is last to arrive filling not just the the house but also everyone's hearts.
    Awkwardness slowly hushing the crowd leaving only a cry of a baby feeling the tension, unwelcoming company.
    Time chipped away at emotions till the final moment of the hour.
    Silence released as soon as the first person stood and took the stage.
    By a selected few,
    words were expressed calling on memories of joy and drawing out tears.
    Reliving what all of us at one moment or another forgotten.
    No dislike or discomfort just sadness from realizing ones' resting and final peace.
    Each of us mentally giving our final farewell.
    Awkwardness was then traded with an ease of love remembrance of each of us one point or another being at the same place,
    sharing those time.
    Laughter filled the room like large waves against the sore of the beach.
    Tears still hung onto a few cheeks but every eye held happier moments and told better stories.
    When all was said and done
    One by one the sound of shuffling feat exited the building.
    Each again give our one last final farewell.

    Submitted on 2017-08-13 13:28:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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