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    dots Submission Name: The Wantdots
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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.98 - 2121/2077/1562
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Wantdots
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         i am not the wandering soul, forlorn and forgotten
         but remain, have always been, wedged
         right smack in the middle
         of your beauty












         and my full and tumescent heart.










         has of it
         the sensitivity of
         a prick























         and you are all
         of a breath

         
    thin membrane
















































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