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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 137/245/159
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    and i forgot your name this time around – truly –
    I remember the sharply bent face, and the way white wine
    –out of nerves- damped
    your whiskers.

    My Luscher test says I lack allies -- your tobacco-filled mouth
    could well be a fine substitute
    to mosquito filled nooks, terracotta stained sandals, my own
    sharp curve of hip
    digging up
    rough wet sand to the Indian ocean




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      i think, definitely, you have a way with words. not much of an art guy, but sometimes the way that you put things -
    like something that stood out to me at a museum. if you could buy people's poetry off them - i would buy that.

    saw this one yesterday.
    admire it again today.
    | Posted on 2017-08-23 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      "Well if it's up to me I'll take that rough wet sand and resurrect the tower of Babel. A gleaming Ziggurat that will reach the sky. A bridge to the innate fecundity of the cosmos which we'll so boldly embody when we emote and exude. Our nimbuses will glow with transcendental translucence", I said as I put out another cigarette.

    alias monad
    | Posted on 2017-08-23 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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