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    dots Submission Name: dots

    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.98 - 2124/2082/1579
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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              Maria.                              I have wanted you.

         * throwing out algorithms.
         * so tactile

                                       the fevered ridges of your skin
         i thought nothing could smooth

    Submitted on 2017-08-24 22:49:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      THe paper is all southing and stuff, it feels in the eyes . ta blank must of been what i wanted to here,lol Teika5
    | Posted on 2017-08-26 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]

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