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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.98 - 2126/2083/1587
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    you see?
    how you have your life. i have my life
    and the two things rightly hold no correlation
    but what it is is that i have fingered
    a hole in my chest. picked at it. worked at it.
    worried it
    to

                                        a pod of space and starlight
                                  that shouldn't exist


         














                                                      * there is the living

    * and the two things beside eachother






    Submitted on 2017-08-26 08:07:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    much like, not knowing what to do with your hands





    | Posted on 2017-08-26 00:00:00 | by thesunbird | [ Reply to This ]


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