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    dots Submission Name: no sky on the other side dots
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    Author: teika5
    ASL Info:    46 / m/ artesia ca
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 38/9/16
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Dark
    Total Views: 276
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    Description:
       I would like to introduce pagan thought to our community .
    Not such a false if one put the metal to the edge .


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsno sky on the other side dots
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    As we look into time we see us,
    the maker of time

    <and> such as it is
    the hue of sky is our precept

    <as> we look into our end
    we think what we think

    I would argue ,
    the stars and the blue

    For/ the blue is what we see
    and the stars could be our watchers?>

    there ,, now the end is all
    and still/ its what we think

    ah.. no sky on the other side

    still there is our confusion of reality
    does that peg fit , or not
    check it out for your self

    is our stars , holes to somewhere else
    a port hole for souls to travel
    Maybe .......




    Submitted on 2017-08-26 20:23:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the last stanza of these random thoughts. Stars could be the theoretical white holes that spit out all the matter a black hole from a different dimension sucked up.
    | Posted on 2017-08-26 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]


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