A Thousand Reflections

Author: endlessgame23 ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 28 /42 /44 Words: 117

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A Thousand Reflections

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I am the first Titan to emerge From the primordial waters Eldest of seven My heart, black as it may be Is gilded and empty Only to be filled By light and love I walk The Garden in endless search for an answer to questions unasked I am the Cardinal East House of the vermilion dawn imprisoned in mortal flesh cursed to forever live on

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I liked this. I liked the pause that the first capitalization of Titan caused and -exemplified throughout the poem is that kind of control My heart, black as it may be Is gilded and empty The pause there is really eloquent. Just goes to show - you don't need a sophisticated rhyme set-up so much as a solid rhythm and structure. It is something, isn't it, to hold up when the forces are set against you. Thought the poem was beautiful.

| Posted on 2017-08-30 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

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