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Author:	endlessgame23
ASL Info:	25/f/The Endless Table
Elite Ratio:	3.22 - 28/42/44
Words:	117

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	1448
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A Thousand Reflections dots

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I am the first
Titan to emerge
From the primordial waters
Eldest of seven

My heart, black as it may be
Is gilded and empty
Only to be filled
By light and love

I walk The Garden
in endless search
for an answer
to questions unasked

I am the Cardinal East
House of the vermilion dawn
imprisoned in mortal flesh
cursed to forever live on

Submitted on 2017-08-26 23:01:07 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I liked this. I liked the pause that the first capitalization of Titan caused and -exemplified throughout the poem is that kind of control

My heart, black as it may be
Is gilded and empty

The pause there is really eloquent.
Just goes to show - you don't need a sophisticated rhyme set-up so much as a solid rhythm and structure.

It is something, isn't it, to hold up
when the forces are set against you.

Thought the poem was beautiful.

| Posted on 2017-08-30 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.