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    dots Submission Name: A Thousand Reflectionsdots
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    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 26/38/30
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsA Thousand Reflectionsdots
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    I am the first
    Titan to emerge
    From the primordial waters
    Eldest of seven

    My heart, black as it may be
    Is gilded and empty
    Only to be filled
    By light and love

    I walk The Garden
    in endless search
    for an answer
    to questions unasked

    I am the Cardinal East
    House of the vermilion dawn
    imprisoned in mortal flesh
    cursed to forever live on




    Submitted on 2017-08-26 23:01:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this. I liked the pause that the first capitalization of Titan caused and -exemplified throughout the poem is that kind of control

    My heart, black as it may be
    Is gilded and empty

    The pause there is really eloquent.
    Just goes to show - you don't need a sophisticated rhyme set-up so much as a solid rhythm and structure.

    It is something, isn't it, to hold up
    when the forces are set against you.

    Thought the poem was beautiful.



    | Posted on 2017-08-30 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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