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    dots Submission Name: Not the Devil, but the Winddots

    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 28/41/44
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsNot the Devil, but the Winddots

    It was the wind
    through her hair,
    how her smile said
    she didn't care
    It was the cool breeze
    and how she looked
    so fragile down there
    on her little knees

    It was the wind
    whispering sins
    come along again
    Beautiful Wild
    Let me feel
    you from within

    It was the wind
    breathing life into the embers
    of the last dying star
    the awful wicked temptation
    tormenting my fractured souls

    It was the wind
    dancing through the leaves
    sunlight peeking through the shadows
    a little play of light and dark upon her face
    as we sat beneath the bows
    of her favorite willow tree
    that became her grave

    I didn't mean to..

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