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FamiliarDemons ©™


Author: kyserin
ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
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Words: 121
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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FamiliarDemons ©™



FamiliarDemons ©™

Demons screaming inside
It's exhausting living in ones mind
You never speak a word they say
But your mind is so loud

You are damaged, you are broken
You're afraid,
we are the ones Standing at the ready , no need for shame

We don't judge, we sit and whisper
Thoughts in and out , still silent
No need for doubt

We are here , we are comfort
Endless tears , unhealed sorrows
Darkness Consuming but you've
Nothing to Fear

We'll take it away , leave it behind
We demons promise to ease one's mind , anther day passes , We by your side ,Emapthy with no bounds
No will To Die




Submitted on 2017-08-27 15:33:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Sometimes our Demons are the only things that we can rely on.

It is our past that shapes our futures, molding us.

This is my first comment.

We are here , we are comfort
Endless tears , unhealed sorrows
Darkness Consuming but you've
Nothing to Fear

I feel like after "nothing to fear" the flow is kind of missing something. I can not suggest any thing to add though as it still works in its own way.

Really good and I hope this message finds you well.
| Posted on 2017-10-19 00:00:00 | by Mepoduo | [ Reply to This ]


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