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    dots Submission Name: FamiliarDemons ©™dots
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    Author: kyserin
    ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 44/25/52
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    FamiliarDemons ©™

    Demons screaming inside
    It's exhausting living in ones mind
    You never speak a word they say
    But your mind is so loud

    You are damaged, you are broken
    You're afraid,
    we are the ones Standing at the ready , no need for shame

    We don't judge, we sit and whisper
    Thoughts in and out , still silent
    No need for doubt

    We are here , we are comfort
    Endless tears , unhealed sorrows
    Darkness Consuming but you've
    Nothing to Fear

    We'll take it away , leave it behind
    We demons promise to ease one's mind , anther day passes , We by your side ,Emapthy with no bounds
    No will To Die




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      Sometimes our Demons are the only things that we can rely on.

    It is our past that shapes our futures, molding us.

    This is my first comment.

    We are here , we are comfort
    Endless tears , unhealed sorrows
    Darkness Consuming but you've
    Nothing to Fear

    I feel like after "nothing to fear" the flow is kind of missing something. I can not suggest any thing to add though as it still works in its own way.

    Really good and I hope this message finds you well.
    | Posted on 2017-10-19 00:00:00 | by Mepoduo | [ Reply to This ]


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