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    dots Submission Name: Arrow & AfterShockdots
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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.95 - 2137/2098/1679
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsArrow & AfterShockdots
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         &. we are the source
         The Ingot.
         the sun stone skips its light off of

         
                                                                               for miles out


                                            collateral damage
                                            batoned back.


              from
              the anomaly







    Submitted on 2017-08-30 14:24:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Fantastic. You should edit this as one entire piece including the comments. (Not my comments the other ones.) wow, insanely moving. This took me to another place and time; reliving moments from the past. That's what makes you such a great writer. You can take your audience to an unexpected level. It's not an escape. It's more like the feeling of living in the moment one more time. Right? Because for most people if a memory is that good they want to capture the feeling and never forget or let go. Of course every individual holds love differently within them. The visual of expelling all of that out in one breath, it allowed the reader to exhale as well. Almost as if the entire read to about the end was one long inhale with the final line being the ballon release. Phhhgggll. I love the song. All of it.
    | Posted on 2017-11-04 00:00:00 | by Chelebel | [ Reply to This ]
      













    We, are the city



















    | Posted on 2017-08-30 00:00:00 | by thesunbird | [ Reply to This ]
      
       From wing tip
                                                                          to wing tip



                                  faking it
                                            making it
           taking


    it
         
                                                      to turbulence


    | Posted on 2017-08-30 00:00:00 | by thesunbird | [ Reply to This ]
      








              and i sit down a bit
              smile a bit
              look down a time
              slip down in my booth
              a bit like
              the guy

         

                                                 who
                                                 has gotten
                                                 that out in one breath




    | Posted on 2017-08-30 00:00:00 | by thesunbird | [ Reply to This ]


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