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    dots Submission Name: Going to the Walldots
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    Author: teika5
    ASL Info:    46 / m/ parts unknow
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 46/9/20
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Venting
    Total Views: 1874
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    Bytes: 1087



    Description:
       I was thinking of those moments of social worlds ,
    Then noticing it was not me or you, it was us. talking over coffee. I remember such knowing of something but not really; the dark joke could of been from anywhere. It's was then , as dancing around the issues, I became the lye or hate of those worlds . So many words to express dislike for the ways those phases take from the moments , and they become something else.

    the they seemed
    far more disturbing , A something


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    dotsGoing to the Walldots
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    These ideals are ,strange
    How they come from a darker side+
    the subject is either me or you./

    While , in the middle of looking
    "I was looking for me:"
    Then I worried about you.?

    the strange hum of you,/rather /
    suddenly you -
    made me paranoid .

    The makings of you;
    are very different than me
    How is it you could say that?

    <the stress built to panic>

    I'll pull my hairs out
    Knowing something lingers

    < thought i went native for a good sec..>

    Then your comment
    " I was dumb as a brick ??"

    " Well sack of potato 's "
    said ,the Son of a bitch ,
    (screaming )
    "I 'm not sane any more !"

    After all those cups of java ,
    and the ways ,( as one does )
    took moments from me ,
    mocking my words; Why?

    It was something said ,
    not any fact at all.




    Submitted on 2017-08-31 03:22:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity."
    -Edgar Allan Poe

    It was a little hard to follow, but that makes the theme all the more concrete.

    Great write, thanks for sharing :)
    | Posted on 2017-09-14 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]


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