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    dots Submission Name: going,,,"Skin."dots
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    Author: teika5
    ASL Info:    46 / m/ artesia ca
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 38/9/16
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Prose/Depressed
    Total Views: 1044
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    Bytes: 771



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       I was thinking about home , and we seemed like friends .
    THen i notice it was not me or you,
    the they seemed
    far more disturbing , A something


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    These ideals are ,strange
    How they come from a darker side+
    the subject is either me or you./

    but , in the middle of looking
    "I was looking for me ;-
    THen I worried about you.?

    the strange hum of you,/rather /
    you all of a sudden -
    made me paranoid ,

    THe what of you;
    is very different than me

    the stress built to panic
    I, i pull my hairs out .
    NOw ,; I am< not in-sean >

    i thought i went native for a good sec..
    NA; turns out i was dumb as a brick .
    my, sack of potato 's
    said , Son of a bitch "
    (screaming )
    "I 'm not sane any more ".





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      "I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity."
    -Edgar Allan Poe

    It was a little hard to follow, but that makes the theme all the more concrete.

    Great write, thanks for sharing :)
    | Posted on 2017-09-14 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]


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