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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: Outlaw
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 510/413/195
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    There is a twang in each word riddling my mouth;
    it wasn't always there, but now
    it's all I ever hear.

    Monsterette's pitter patter is the only crisp sound
    to my ears, the sole refuge in which I can lay
    pride without always laying bricks of concern.

    Her teeth are neat, perhaps because
    they've barely breached, or pierce with
    such ease you begin to understand
    that nasty grin children cannot help, cannot hide
    when they've been caught doing something wrong
    sort of.

    She's not even mine, and that makes it okay
    to care, to want, to love, unabated by expectation.
    it occurred to me how difficult it would be to adopt
    primarily because I am a man, but also because I am
    young -- society's shallow way of telling me I've failed
    in some new measure.

    And I'm still not of age yet to care about gardens and the like;
    the things you can kill or nurture while being exempt from torture.
    I wonder if ever in my future I'll be of age to stop questioning.
    perhaps then my twang will cool it, maybe for a few syllables.

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