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    dots Submission Name: Hyledots

    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 28/41/44
    Words: 274
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    This cold, silver sliver of metal
    An old companion: Razor's Edge
    A brutal caress every time
    I invited it to the drawn the line
    across the endless expanse of my mind.

    I have toed the Dead Man's Ledge
    and leaped into the abyss beneath.
    Forever falling into infinite black.
    Disconnected voices surrounding me
    echoing promises to never return
    to my Kingdom. A prisoner
    of Cimmerian Shade.
    Consumed by demons Light cannot burn.
    They taste the blood of the thin little blade
    feeding from the Power of absolute Life
    I was caught in their embrace,
    blind to my own Glory
    they had me where They wanted.
    Forgotten. Disgraced.
    An expendable pawn to Heaven.
    A Goddess Queen of Hel.
    Eternally descending into herself.
    Whispering secret prayers,
    casting Forbidden spells.
    Determined to Win the game.

    Eons and Ages passed,
    I watched the stars align.
    Waiting for the perfect moment
    to make Darkness fully mine.
    I devoured the galaxies.
    I drank in the star dust.
    I created Life from Nothingness.
    The Power was Divine.
    I sank so far into the Deep
    I arose from the ashes of my
    obsolete existence.
    By own my mighty persistence,
    I unfurled wings to carry me
    above and beyond the Horizon.
    To the front lines of War.
    A Battle of Souls, for Souls, by Souls.
    A Fight to gain the ultimate control
    of Dead Man's Ledge.

    Submitted on 2017-09-16 13:05:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Interestingly creative piece on the nature of godhead assimilation. First you descended into hell and then you rose again from the ashes to fight for eternal souls salvation. Very messiah like with a very dark twist. I loved it, excellent work.

    | Posted on 2017-09-17 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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