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    dots Submission Name: Sword in the Waterdots
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    Author: Wolfwatching
    ASL Info:    28/Male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    7.76 - 92/129/107
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsSword in the Waterdots
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    Ripples and waves;
    A sound in the water
    Cutting clear hems
    Will we sleep?

    Hear it far away
    It's granite sinking
    Compacts and clocks
    Through faces in the street

    Which is to say
    It keeps time
    Its sound in the water;

    Which is to say
    It keeps time.

    The panging of a bell;
    Its stalwart shadow on the wall
    In rain, is a mirror while we sleep
    Which is to say
    We see nothing at all.

    The sounds I hear beneath words
    That keep me up 'till morning time
    A sword in the water
    Which is to say
    It is wet from harm.

    The glad sun sees it
    And the reaches darken,
    The mood darkens

    Sword in the water keeps time
    Which is to say
    It will hit the air soon.

    The sword in the water
    Keeps time
    Which is to say




    Submitted on 2017-09-24 06:54:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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