Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Sword in the Waterdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Wolfwatching
    ASL Info:    28/Male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    7.82 - 93/129/108
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 993
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 975



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsSword in the Waterdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Ripples and waves;
    A sound in the water
    Cutting clear hems
    Will we sleep?

    Hear it far away
    It's granite sinking
    Compacts and clocks
    Through faces in the street

    Which is to say
    It keeps time
    Its sound in the water;

    Which is to say
    It keeps time.

    The panging of a bell;
    Its stalwart shadow on the wall
    In rain, is a mirror while we sleep
    Which is to say
    We see nothing at all.

    The sounds I hear beneath words
    That keep me up 'till morning time
    A sword in the water
    Which is to say
    It is wet from harm.

    The glad sun sees it
    And the reaches darken,
    The mood darkens

    Sword in the water keeps time
    Which is to say
    It will hit the air soon.

    The sword in the water
    Keeps time
    Which is to say




    Submitted on 2017-09-24 06:54:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    201949

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    to Be like written by KeeperOfLight
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Birds of a Feather written by poetotoe
    My Four Seasons written by faideddarkness
    Carry written by saartha
    prison written by ShyOne
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Angel Eyes written by poetotoe
    Relativity written by poetotoe
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Life is moments written by Ramneet
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    Love written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    Redemption written by poetotoe
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Cover written by saartha
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry