I think a lot of things about this poem so here are some of them...
your action lines
Its sound in the water;
We see nothing at all.
It is wet from harm.
might be stronger if they were put in bold.
Generally I love this but it's complex enough I am dumb enough to not fully be able to appreciate it. I don't think that's a criticism at all, what I think really is that what bars you from some poems is experience, clearly, you have experienced this, and clearly - i have not got to that part of my life yet, which simply says, to me, shut up and listen more. Shut up, and let the poem do the talking. Listen, so that you recognize it when you come across it... that's all I mean.
I like the way this poem moves through senses or backs off into consciousness so that all way way through it is there and not there. To me, when a person writes, they can be so on point, but that is just one little point, there is of course everything else. So a poem presents a biased and often limited -even unfair focus. I guess what I saying is that that is what I think this poem is about. Imagine you are looking at some water rippling in the light -and then limiting yourself to the way it glints in just one spot. The dilemma for a poet (or a person) is that, collectively, the image is too full or too sparse.
There is all you want to say, and that which leaves you wordless. I don't know. I am a warrior. I am a peaceful day.
That's what makes a person.