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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsKeepdots
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    You're not you anymore.
    Your elated eyes and smirking smile;
    Your witty words and teasing touch
    These are all mine to keep

    The same shoes guide your feet,
    But you stand differently in them
    Your expressions are foreign
    and your voice lands strangely in my ears

    I linger on the memory of your hips
    swinging me gently to a loud rhythm
    But those hips have faded
    and are replaced by a warm body amongst hundreds on the street

    I've lay wrapped in the soft sweater you're wearing
    But now it's just Macy's Item: 465268;
    Your jeans are just a pair of Levi Classic Wash;
    And your coat gets lost in the sea of grey New York

    You're not you anymore.
    The you that I loved has stayed behind in my memories
    And he is all mine to keep.




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