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    dots Submission Name: Adorationdots
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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    4.97 - 180/113/59
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsAdorationdots
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    I speak in verbs
    She cries in adoration-
    a lamentation of the past that could have been

    We see through glass
    Stained and convexated;
    she's exasperated, but her vision's just too keen

    A focal point-
    She stands, amalgamated;
    for one so celebrated, I barely hear her scream

    I thought I knew her truth
    But she sighs... the world has faded
    the end has elongated, there's too much inbetween




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