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    dots Submission Name: Day 6dots
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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsDay 6dots
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    I hold dear her heart's content
    She smiles with fading eyes and hostile scent
    Tumultuous thoughts and restless hands and feed
    She shakes the walls around her but dares not speak

    Under a sky of wavelengths that fall too low
    And floor of small excuses that dare not grow
    I see her skin sink deeper still
    And hope trepidly the light won't absorb her will

    Fast annihilation and slow mercy of sin-
    The walls won't budge with staring and the floor won't let her in
    So she sinks down deeper, the web of thoughts grown thin
    And builds the doors sealed off with key locks from within





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