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    dots Submission Name: Day 5dots
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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDay 5dots
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    Hoolahooping is hard
    Especially for an 8-year-old with no rhythm
    It's even harder to watch everyone else spin their hips and magically make it work

    You sit and watch, rationalizing that it is a talent they were born with
    Or maybe their mom taught them
    (your mom taught you how to pickle tomatoes in your living room)

    The sun beats down as you lean against the fence,
    as you squint not from the rays,
    but to hide the tears of frustration

    "Quack-a-dilly oso" starts to echo in the background,
    followed by 12-mini clapping hands
    You clench your fists and sulk toward the corner of the playground

    That's probably a talent they were born with, too
    (And you need talents to make friends.)




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