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    dots Submission Name: // Seasonal Songdots
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    Author: ShadowParadox
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 25/68/35
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       For the Autumn People ♡


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    dots// Seasonal Songdots
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    I have found the Autumn people
    Who’ve lost their blooms
    Wandering in wild forests
    Their ember eyes; fiery
    Their hearts beating vibrant notes
    As they dance & sing
    Beneath a orange moon
    September’s music pulsing in their voices




    Submitted on 2017-09-25 02:35:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "I like it, the seasonal aspect is also appropriate for this time of year. I noticed one mistake though, probably a typo. Seventh line down second word seems to be missing an n. Keep up the good work.----"
    | Posted on 2017-09-27 00:00:00 | by mugsy | [ Reply to This ]


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