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// Seasonal Song


Author: ShadowParadox
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Words: 38
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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For the Autumn People ♡


// Seasonal Song



I have found the Autumn people
Who’ve lost their blooms
Wandering in wild forests
Their ember eyes; fiery
Their hearts beating vibrant notes
As they dance & sing
Beneath a orange moon
September’s music pulsing in their voices




Submitted on 2017-09-25 02:35:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "I like it, the seasonal aspect is also appropriate for this time of year. I noticed one mistake though, probably a typo. Seventh line down second word seems to be missing an n. Keep up the good work.----"
| Posted on 2017-09-27 00:00:00 | by mugsy | [ Reply to This ]


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