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    dots Submission Name: Florida's Autumn Solsticedots
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    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFlorida's Autumn Solsticedots
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    I built it,
    for imagination
    of warmth never received

    and it gave
    everything to me

    I watched
    delicate orange dancers
    tickle and tease

    solid wooden platform
    on which to feed

    lace-like wisps
    released into crystal-blue
    that honking geese just flew through

    a uniformed march north?
    Maybe Georgia holds more promise

    and it rained
    only for a minute,
    but it was fresh and new

    and needed
    as if I really knew

    I sit and watch
    the solemn blazing embers
    exert their final, dying, release

    of beauty,
    and wish




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