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    dots Submission Name: Delicious Stewsdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDelicious Stewsdots
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    I see within
    a thought of judgment
    against my brother
    and lay it down.

    On the see-saw
    of inferiority
    and
    superiority
    I no longer wish to play.

    Compared to you
    I am more or less
    why play this
    "I need to be the same" game!
    Or "my different
    is better (or worse) than yours" bore!

    Why slice and dice my brother?
    Or myself, for that matter?
    God's hand is upon us
    and we are as yet unfinished works.
    Do we eat the stew before its cooked
    and judge it a failure?
    Can we trust the Chef to boil us up
    to the point of deliciousness?
    Will he make our aroma pleasing?
    And our flavour delighting to him?
    Oh yes!

    I lay down my opinions of unfinished stews
    And trust the Chef!




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      You know, I realize that competition gets way out of hand in human terms. Cutthroat, backstabbing, corporate takeovers, etc. Contrary to all these facts it keeps us on our toes and makes us strive to do our best. We need it to help us improve our game. Nothing wrong with a little bit of friendly competition with good sportsmanship included. It's only when it becomes like skirmishes in a war that it becomes a burden. When we stop having empathetic consideration for our fellow man and lose all sight of probity. Ontological deontology can be a wonderful thing, it's too bad we're not all incentivized by it!!!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2017-09-30 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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