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Across the bed


Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 139 /258 /171
Words: 45
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Across the bed



and if I don’t get up
to right
where will it go, electric
current up whose nerve
ending the clock
is still an hour shy
of midnight -- & don’t I know
that this
will be a restless
one?




Submitted on 2017-10-10 14:51:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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