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    dots Submission Name: Still Perfectly Flaweddots
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    Author: armand
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    dotsStill Perfectly Flaweddots
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    thank you for making me
    feel so fucking dirty
    making me feel so alive
    with your guiltiness



    naked and frail
    looking for an end to
    all the desires that you have
    wrapped around me




    and I am just an error
    perhaps way out of line
    but that is ok
    because this is life



    How can I
    not smell your lies
    when I am buried between yours thighs
    feeling the hollow of your
    precious memory

    and so

    here we are, again
    just pretend that we haven't been here, before
    to make it easier for tortured body
    bending over backwards for me
    don't you see the hollowness inside
    of my mind as you

    comfort me
    erase me
    color me back in to place again

    so I thank you for
    making me
    feel so fucking dirty
    making feel so alive again
    with my own guiltiness




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