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    dots Submission Name: phantom limbsdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 137/243/158
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsphantom limbsdots
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    rain pelts and jitters on the tent,
    a loupe of breath and stale coffee
    it steams above the terracotta earth; I find
    myself amiss, my phantom limb
    displaced with sudden vengeance

    I sat and watched its wriggling ugly body,
    my cut up earthworm

    its anguish didn’t touch me.

    It rained again, later
    the spreading wetness
    on my knees




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