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    Author: poetotoe
    Elite Ratio:    2.09 - 628/446/506
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Relativity

    A thousand times
    times a thousand times
    remain one thousand times
    a million times I have loved you.

    Each second counted with each kiss
    billions of hours transformed our love
    among the planets these galaxies found
    the universe displays night after night.

    What love is, what love can be right
    made between the stars this night
    put together between bed sheets
    night after night, two to claim.

    Another star shines brightly
    for two to see two will love
    their daughters their sons
    all the children of God.




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      Thank you again Faid, not from Dune. Tom
    | Posted on 2017-11-20 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This displays a very good bond two people could have that is beyond any galaxy and the creation the could create is a miracle they both can share that would be like watching a new star form if we had over thousands or millions of years to watch. Then to create a bond with the child best gift from god. I get a sence that you would have to understand relativity to grasp the kind of love written here even to create a new child where you really cannot have the absolute of one or the other but the forming and bonding of this love. Very creative and thanks for sharing.


    Faid
    | Posted on 2017-11-18 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]


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