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    dots Submission Name: mimicrydots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsmimicrydots
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    i thought i’d left before you did
    that winter day that stained the hotel carpet
    I carried it around, in heavy mimicry, devout,
    a butterfly so bent and wicked


    so when he spoke, and mixed smoke
    with after-shave like you did
    -- his compact frame lighting orange
    pour wine -- I’d felt I’d known
    your hot hand before

    tracing the steely lining of my stomach




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