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    dots Submission Name: The Old Milldots
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    Author: Wolfwatching
    ASL Info:    28/Male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    7.68 - 96/136/117
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Old Milldots
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    Passing through Old Bawn;
    Moonlight in the gardens, parked cars,
    Nothing but the clinking
    Of hair gell in a haversack
    And the long drop down
    Over dark river water

    A shared past, these stone walls
    Before the mountains feel so small,
    To my mind, in times dilation
    They are as old as pyramids,

    And their nowness is a problem resolved
    With the red light and the wheel
    Of the old mill coming into view.




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