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Comme un lion en avril


Author: Outlaw
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it's unclear, and I don't really have the words to create the tension, but the idea is that the he pronoun refers to both the role model upon which her romance is based, and also the actual he in which it currently resides. Her father and the man she shares her bed with if you will. I'm looking to eventually work in more lion imagery. Spring, maybe, and the pallor of snow too.


Comme un lion en avril



a fallen claw, left behind, picked up
like an heirloom, but re-purposed in the modern way.
she's kindled by a passion, despite being brought up
by the tendrils of uncaring, unable to say
he is my warmth

instead she clings by the might of her bite
to a stone ledge, an unrequiting dalliance.
she scrapes the claw, again and unlike
her, it creates warmth within compliance.

he steals from me and yet she clings
to his body, a desperate rescue amidst the storm.
she is a murky pearl, a cloudy jade, a beige stratus
before his trembling and towering weakness.
all too familiar a touch, still strangers at heart.

youth is brutal like the billowing of bullying
whispers softly against a child's eardrums
pouring in the serum of self-effacing
depression, a simple lock that takes years to come apart.

youth is desperate like the words of the moribund,
a cumulonimbus striking at the earth quickly, yet lingering
ever feeling tension and fecund attraction --
ripping at the seams like an oncoming convulsion.

she is a victim of this youth, and he is her victim.




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