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    dots Submission Name: i've misseddots
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    Author: mysalvation
    Elite Ratio:    0.98 - 1/1/1
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    I miss the days i use to write.
    beneath a cobweb cage.
    dusty pages kept the video playing.
    i miss the days i use to draw.
    in those days, i had so much to say.
    So much to look forward to completing,
    and failing at every last one....
    i remember, i thought seconds were endless
    i remember i thought time was free
    did you ever think time was free?

    well, i remember those days, when i use to see the lines
    in your face.
    i did not say, that i miss those days.
    lets fast forward to rewind
    the times i told you, i loved you
    when i first met you, before all the tears gone by.
    living on the strain, that braught me here today.
    i've made my choices. ive kept my secrets.
    but,you weren't one of those things i kept...

    I miss the days i use to write.
    out shined a cobweb cage.
    dusty pages, black ink, kept the video playing.
    i miss the days i use to draw.
    in those days, i had so much to say.




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      i remember, i thought seconds were endless
    i remember i thought time was free
    did you ever think time was free?

    I remember. It was beautiful then. Like a gentle wind gliding across the face as I dipped my toes in the ocean.

    This is quite nice.

    Thanks for that.

    Jane
    | Posted on 2018-02-15 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]


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