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    dots Submission Name: prisondots
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    Author: ShyOne
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 31/13/25
    Words: 346
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
    Total Views: 268
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    dotsprisondots
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    what's the point of my position
    when there's no one here to know
    on and on in each direction
    i am still alone

    viable and varied maybe i can make a dent
    but what's the point of saying
    when the truth won't make much sense

    the density of this situation
    coupled with my mind
    is the hardest thing to lose
    and the quickest thing to find

    value at the valley
    take a token for your taste
    i'll surrender to the sound
    when i'm just about to break

    back and forth for periods of time
    i'll decide the path to take
    and get what's truly mine

    you can have your own decision
    i'll decide upon my own
    but i'll be fine the 100th time
    you haunt my happy home

    you can whisper in the cloud
    when i forget your name
    but be careful with your doubts
    because this is not a game

    ask me accidentaly
    tell me all the time
    ask me for a melody
    i truly do not mind
    take it all for granted
    if it happens every day
    but do not take it all
    everything will fade

    taste it for a second
    medicate your mind
    the cure is in the spaces
    out of space and time
    ask for elementry
    school is for the rest
    i can steal the course
    because i passed the test

    situation complication has me mostly baseless looking for a better bracelet shining brightly utter nonsese for the peek in last weeks window what am i if not afraid now that all the pieces fit what is it i have made.

    the last thing on your mind
    is the first that i can tell
    so thank you for the memories
    in this cut rate seat in hell
    after all the flicker
    the lights will work just fine
    masking all the motion
    is the closest to a lie

    eenie meenie minee mow
    that's the river left to row
    i don't need a new way out
    the whole way in
    i'm almost out.




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