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    dots Submission Name: Shidots
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    Author: ShyOne
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 31/13/25
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
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    i do not need a song
    you do not need a clue
    the mystery is everything
    and we both might have a few

    it's a delicate procedure
    watch those needles in my mind
    this is just a part of me
    so let the steel divide

    the corpse of what there was
    still wanders out of town
    just to feed it's appetite.
    i will come back down

    faster than the first but always coming last
    the feeling of the moment is a mission in the past
    i don't wanna play you like another friendly fool
    but we are just two people and this is just a tool
    so don't let the weight sink you down
    to the bodies in the pool

    after all the shimmer
    it's the simple kind of shine
    the type to make you sick
    from staring all the time
    take it how you taste it
    and don't trust the common sense
    after all it's delicate
    when you're cleaning up a mess
    as for me and all the models
    and for you and all the goals
    tomorrow is a work day
    and i feel like spinning gold.







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