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    dots Submission Name: Carrydots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 230/383/131
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 29
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1177



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    dotsCarrydots
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    Riding herd on the body, the gargoyle
    takes it down to the poetry meet.

    The room is red and the body
    unsettles, briefly nervous
    as though confronted with innards

    but there are others,
    other animals in the room
    so it steps inward to rub elbows
    and find a seat.

    The poetry begins and the gargoyle
    is pleased, in a distant way
    watching the air move up
    through the lungs,

    vibrating the molecules
    through the room and the body
    winds the little sounds

    like a fanciful ribbon
    into its hair, the inexplicable
    flourish of beasts.

    Little tremors of air
    go on for some time, then cease
    apropos of nothing at all

    and the gargoyle chivies the body
    out the door, little hedonist,
    out the red room, out the city

    out into the ellipsis of night, the gargoyle
    vicious rictus unrelenting
    is still pleased, distantly

    by a dull chore well done,
    swinging the body farther and farther
    up the escalade of starlight.




    Submitted on 2017-12-04 00:38:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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