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    dots Submission Name: Carrydots

    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 230/385/134
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Riding herd on the body, the gargoyle
    takes it down to the poetry meet.

    The room is red and the body
    unsettles, briefly nervous
    as though confronted with innards

    but there are others,
    other animals in the room
    so it steps inward to rub elbows
    and find a seat.

    The poetry begins and the gargoyle
    is pleased, in a distant way
    watching the air move up
    through the lungs,

    vibrating the molecules
    through the room and the body
    winds the little sounds

    like a fanciful ribbon
    into its hair, the inexplicable
    flourish of beasts.

    Little tremors of air
    go on for some time, then cease
    apropos of nothing at all

    and the gargoyle chivies the body
    out the door, little hedonist,
    out the red room, out the city

    out into the ellipsis of night, the gargoyle
    vicious rictus unrelenting
    is still pleased, distantly

    by a dull chore well done,
    swinging the body farther and farther
    up the escalade of starlight.

    Submitted on 2017-12-04 00:38:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like how the poem looks at writing as a process (as far as I can see), whether it be the venting of spleen, but even on a deeper level the movements and reactions of the external world with the body, how its taken in, or years later comes back through memory and having an effect on the system. Like the kind of thing you forgot about yourself and makes you sick to remember. And then the role of the Gargoyle, where water usually gathers to a point of overloading and then must exit through the mouth. Infernal secrets to be sure ha. But no I think if this is anything partly towards what its conveying I think its very well done actually.

    I kind of looked at it that way early on and then just enjoyed seeing that process described here.

    Thanks for the read.
    | Posted on 2017-12-16 00:00:00 | by Wolfwatching | [ Reply to This ]

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