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    dots Submission Name: Etiquettedots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 230/384/131
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsEtiquettedots
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    Let's clear the air: neither of us
    believes the other is real
    even when crassly corporeal,
    bulking up the produce aisle

    the fact of a person can become hazy
    milky around the edges
    as though through thick cataracts
    or a white clot of time

    We are each addressing
    the uncertain memory of the other
    in the same embarrassed way
    one reschedules a forgotten appointment.

    But despite two ghosts suddenly
    appearing next to the tomatoes,
    social convention smears
    its greasy hands over everything

    and one of us takes the dive,
    reluctantly asking,
    “And how have you been
    since middle school?”




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