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    dots Submission Name: Lovedots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 230/384/131
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLovedots
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    He told me he loved me

    and it was a good opportunity:
    a nice boy
    with handsome prospects

    I was half a world from home
    teeming with wildness, with the sense
    that I could be a brand-new anyone

    could take a lover,
    a foreign fling, as they say

    but in the rolling heat of Africa
    or the driving rains of Washington
    I am myself

    spiky as an urchin

    and could only think
    with great derision

    Oh god,
    spare me.




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