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    dots Submission Name: the living momentdots
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    Author: ShyOne
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 31/14/25
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
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    dotsthe living momentdots
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    reliving lives i've never lived
    to prove the things i never did
    it hasn't taken me that far
    it doesn't do well for my heart
    it's hard enough to hold your hand
    and feel like i am still a man
    all the cloudy things i see
    the long forgotten memories

    i don't know
    how you know
    but maybe you do and i'm just blind
    i won't show
    as it grows
    and slowly takes over my own mind

    i'm not telling you at all
    the way it feels to take a fall
    it's all inside this much i know
    the river has me in it's flow
    so no matter how hard i swim
    i'm bound to go beneath again
    i am not playing the same game
    this time i think i've gone insane

    i don't know
    how you know
    but maybe you do and i'm just blind
    i won't show
    as it grows
    and slowly takes over my own mind

    this feeling always bleeds me dry
    i'm left to suffer knowing why
    the system stops and i'm alone
    lost in the shell of my old home
    so no matter how it feels right now
    there is an answer without doubt
    that after all the pain there is relief
    the truth is just that hard to believe




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