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    dots Submission Name: Fasade dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFasade dots
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    It's as if a piece of my heart has a flesh eating disease
    That part of my heart will never come back
    never will it heal
    Blackened and wilted away til the end of my days

    I hold onto every memory
    Every small and mundane thing
    My mind flips through all the things I knew about you
    All the small things,
    All the memories,

    As if remembering might help me hold onto you for just a bit longer
    It does not ease the pain
    It does not shed light on my partially wilted heart

    Simply a false facade that keeps me afloat during my darkest of days without my best friend, my husband ... my everything




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