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It's sad knowing that I was right the first time around.
I tried to let you go before it was to late,
But you showed me more hope than I could ignore.
A hope that is now long gone.
I didn't ignore the warning signs.
You just made them impossible to read,
And now that you're truly gone.
I am forced to finally see.
I don't blame you though.
It's not like either of us could've planned this.
This world has a funny way with the things that live on it.
Always finding a way to make the beautiful seem so ugly.
Regardless though I do think this is right.
Even if I have to smile through the pain.
You just try your best to stay under the sun,
And I'll find my way though the rain.
Submitted on 2018-01-01 02:14:17
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Is it not "me" for "my" ?
"But you showed my more hope than I could ignore."
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