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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.46 - 5/116/132
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    It's sad knowing that I was right the first time around.
    I tried to let you go before it was to late,
    But you showed me more hope than I could ignore.
    A hope that is now long gone.

    I didn't ignore the warning signs.
    You just made them impossible to read,
    And now that you're truly gone.
    I am forced to finally see.

    I don't blame you though.
    It's not like either of us could've planned this.
    This world has a funny way with the things that live on it.
    Always finding a way to make the beautiful seem so ugly.

    Regardless though I do think this is right.
    Even if I have to smile through the pain.
    You just try your best to stay under the sun,
    And I'll find my way though the rain.




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      A simple footnote, please disregard this.
    | Posted on 2018-01-03 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Is it not "me" for "my" ?


    "But you showed my more hope than I could ignore."
    | Posted on 2018-01-01 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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