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Author: Cordell
ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592 /807 /392
Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /Me
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Exclusively for Eliteskills.com 2018 Happy New years been with ya for 19 years plus its been awhile but maybe I am back depends on my views and comments night from North America...


Your Lover



Been lonely even though I'm with you
been wanting to leave wanting it through
wanting to be happy
something you can't seen to do

Tired of pretending
tired of the lies
tired of the restless night
wondering why

Been packing, slowly moving out
you haven't even noticed
what was that about

I want to be happy, deserve it so
moving on would be my best bet
just wanted you to know
hope you're okay no regrets

Who knows what the future holds
who knows we could bump into each other
but until then please know
I could never be your lover...

S.H.




Submitted on 2018-01-01 20:56:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This feels as if it could be any relationship, work, love, professional, familial or otherwise. When someone is too preoccupied to notice the distance has become canyon sized, then the relationship is already dead. All that can be done now is to file an official coroner's report from a new location. Just some thoughts.
| Posted on 2018-04-06 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  The write is full of grievance because of a bad relationship. True love is rare to find and is a true gift of Almighty Lord.
| Posted on 2018-01-15 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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