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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.95 - 2137/2098/1679
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsShudderdots
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         today i am cells
         a growling, snarling way to yearn
         the ten thousand points of my limbs
         which tell me i am hungry





                                       prickly with temper
                                       bitter with
                                       neglect.

                                       an oil based fire
                                       you throw water on.





         i swear to you it is this only.
         the way sunlight covers completely
         all that it may cover,







                                       that sweet swift / conclusion.





    Submitted on 2018-01-04 01:05:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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