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Primitive Lapse

Author: Crestfallenman
ASL Info:    24/M/CA
Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 622 /962 /454
Words: 63
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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Primitive Lapse

In a blink of an eye, the world changes,
Ever revolutionizing around the sun...
The winds developing of a feeling so estrange,
Of the winter, blanketing it's cold thumb...

Where have we gone from here?
A life reflected so far away,
A reactions that relapse in tears,
Awaiting the sun to reset a different day...

This madness within...
This matter herein...

Submitted on 2018-01-11 20:12:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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