Primitive Lapse

Author: Crestfallenman ASL Info:    24/M/CA Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 622 /962 /454 Words: 63

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Primitive Lapse

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In a blink of an eye, the world changes, Ever revolutionizing around the sun... The winds developing of a feeling so estrange, Of the winter, blanketing it's cold thumb... Where have we gone from here? A life reflected so far away, A reactions that relapse in tears, Awaiting the sun to reset a different day... This madness within... This matter herein...

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