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    dots Submission Name: Primitive Lapsedots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 622/961/452
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsPrimitive Lapsedots
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    In a blink of an eye, the world changes,
    Ever revolutionizing around the sun...
    The winds developing of a feeling so estrange,
    Of the winter, blanketing it's cold thumb...

    Where have we gone from here?
    A life reflected so far away,
    A reactions that relapse in tears,
    Awaiting the sun to reset a different day...

    This madness within...
    This matter herein...




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