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    dots Submission Name: Cosmic Dreams dots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 53/167/176
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsCosmic Dreams dots
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    It travels through
    your cosmic cells
    And tells me it’s all love
    Calls upon the empty clouds
    And bargains with the sun



    Reaches out with rais of joy
    And penetrates through the dark



    Brightens up the blackest skies
    And surrounds us with a light.




    The beauty
    inside your soul
    The cosmic lullabies
    control



    The tides
    as they rise and fall
    smothers when you call










    Your love it travels through
    reaches me in my dreams
    Tells me that I’m traveling
    to your cosmic peace.




    Sweet.



    Dreams between
    foretelling other worlds
    The separations of degree
    that kept our hearts unseen.









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      I love this concept, some of the stanza are a little rough against the flow, but otherwise it is rather lovely.
    | Posted on 2018-01-15 00:00:00 | by Queen_of_spades | [ Reply to This ]


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